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miércoles, 28 de enero de 2009

THE NUMBER 13

The day 13th Of May I went with my friends Maria and Raul, to an enormous house that is was next to a garage. We put the car inside the garage, which was very dark. We put the car in the place n. 13, and we went to the house, the number of the house was also the number 13.
We went into the house, all was normal. We went into the bedroom, all was normal except one thing, the number of the bedroom was the number 13.
_“This is very strange”, said Raul
_“Yes, I’dont like it, said Maria”
_“What do we do? , “Said Raul
_“I think that continue seeing the house”, I said
When we went to the kitchen, we saw ten very frightened children.
_“Hello ...” I said
_“Hello …” They said very scared.
_“What are you doing?” said Maria
_“We live here, in this haunted house”. They said.
_“Haunted house!” Said Maria and Raul frightened.
_“Yes, when 13 children enter into the house something terrifying happens”. Said the children.

All the children went to the bedroom, and suddenly appeared a mark with 13 candles burning.

_ “Ooooh no!” said the children.
_“What?”, said Raul???
_“A candle of his type shows that 13 children are in this house, and …” said one of the children.
_“And all the candles have to gone out”. Said another child.
_“And how?” Said Maria.
_“First a person have to die, and a candle have to go out”. Said a child.

One day later, Fran fell down off a swing on a very sharp rock and he died.
One of the candles went out.
The day 15th of May, Ruben and David were playing hide-and-seek, and David was looking for Ruben.
When he went into the bathroom he saw Ruben dead in the floor with something written on his stomach: You will be the next.

Three hours later Andrea saw David dead without head and hands. The hands of David appeared next to Andrea and that started to suffocate her.

Then Carmen and Carlota went to draw in the bedroom, and when Teresa went into the bedroom, Carmen and Carlota were hung by the thumbs in the wall.

To Teresa her eyes fell, and when Thomas went into the room and saw the two dead girls and Teresa without eyes; his mouth begun to bleed.

When Maria, Ruben and I went into the kitchen, Peter and Julia were stabbed with pencils crossing their stomach.

_“Only we remain”, said Raul.
_“ Aaah!!”, shouted Maria.
_“What happened?” I yielded.

Maria was electrocuted; the three of us took hold ourselves strongly and an enormous rod finished with us.
All the candles of the mark went out.
Now nobody wants to go back to this house again.


ELISA SATLI BASTANTE Y MARÍA MURILLO SANCHÍS(1ºESO-B)

1 comentarios:

Unknown dijo...

Very gloomy, but with suspense. I liked it.